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Time has swiftly passed, but my desire for your company has only grown!
Our past was once pleasant, but now you are so far away; You might as well be on the moon.
I initially picked on you, but now I realized you're the best friend I have ever known!
I wish that I had told you how I felt; It's too late now, for you're gone like shadows at noon.
You were the new girl in school, and everyone meanly teased you, to no end.
But then one day, you talked to me; You were kind, and your friendship is the best I've had yet!
Times were tough later, and we ended up not speaking anymore; I sorely miss you, dear friend!
Time has gone by, but hurting you is by far my deepest, saddest regret!
New friends have come and gone, but I only can remember your smiling, friendly face.
I felt so hollow and dead inside; My feelings carved bloody etching into my very soul.
I yearned for you, to feel a friendly hug; You left me alone, like debris in the vacuum of space.
I sunk into an abyss of sorrow, myself the anchor; Without your friendship, I can't be whole.
So here I sit, flipping through photographs; We looked so young and happy... so full of glee!
I hold back my tears, because I am trying to be strong; I must stand alone, my sadness stark.
The tears fall anyway, on the inside; My heart aches terribly... I sorely desire you, next to me!
Your light brightened my world, and I solemnly know that you're gone; I'm still here, in the dark.
Our past was once pleasant, but now you are so far away; You might as well be on the moon.
I initially picked on you, but now I realized you're the best friend I have ever known!
I wish that I had told you how I felt; It's too late now, for you're gone like shadows at noon.
You were the new girl in school, and everyone meanly teased you, to no end.
But then one day, you talked to me; You were kind, and your friendship is the best I've had yet!
Times were tough later, and we ended up not speaking anymore; I sorely miss you, dear friend!
Time has gone by, but hurting you is by far my deepest, saddest regret!
New friends have come and gone, but I only can remember your smiling, friendly face.
I felt so hollow and dead inside; My feelings carved bloody etching into my very soul.
I yearned for you, to feel a friendly hug; You left me alone, like debris in the vacuum of space.
I sunk into an abyss of sorrow, myself the anchor; Without your friendship, I can't be whole.
So here I sit, flipping through photographs; We looked so young and happy... so full of glee!
I hold back my tears, because I am trying to be strong; I must stand alone, my sadness stark.
The tears fall anyway, on the inside; My heart aches terribly... I sorely desire you, next to me!
Your light brightened my world, and I solemnly know that you're gone; I'm still here, in the dark.
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactRaw with emotions and so strong in the message, this poem simply enchants. The sadness is so strong, tactile almost, the sadness of the days gone by and the past which once was - a friendship which is impossible to forget and a grief over having it lost simply overwhelms.
There is not a line which doesn't speak of the loss and memories, the whole poem is built on that emotion, based on sorrow, strengthened by it. Not to mention grief... guilt. and finally, the deep ache which is all the poetic voice now has - hollow ache in his heart where once love blossomed. It is still there, oh yes, only to be replaced with something far stronger.
Pain and loneliness.
Emotions we all avoid.
The technical side of this poem is also immaculate. The end-rhyme is perfect and without error, the lines approximately equally long and the strophes all quatrains. A pattern was followed through the whole poem and was masterfully arranged.
So beautifully emotional and sad, like an elegy to that special someone long gone, the ultimate gift a poet can give. Very special!